Twenty years from now you will be more disappointed by the things that you didn't do than by the things you did. So throw off the bowlines. Sail away from the safe harbor. Catch the trade wind in your sails. Explore. Dream. Discover. -Mark Twain
Wednesday, May 30, 2007
Certainty of Rain
i just stare up the sky and wonder not if, but when the rain will start pouring
the sky is not dark nor gloomy but the certainty of rain is constant
certainty such a confident word such a confident word
good suggestion. i was actually thinking of ending the poem after "such a confident word" but somehow, it felt bitin. so added the last 2 lines even if they didn't quite fit in the poem.
i'm still working on my tula, as well as that write up on that wonderful weekend.
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I like this, Miriel :-)
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I find the last three lines rather blatant, though.
"Certainty, such a confident word," is good--maybe the poem could end here. If you repeat, "such a confident word," it could suggest some irony.
good suggestion. i was actually thinking of ending the poem after "such a confident word" but somehow, it felt bitin. so added the last 2 lines even if they didn't quite fit in the poem.
i'm still working on my tula, as well as that write up on that wonderful weekend.
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